Wednesday, December 12, 2012

Predator - Part 12

Orion guided a quiet Lorena to the car - her steps never faltered she counted on him to lead her safely

or had given up hope of safety

At his car -- he pushed her against his truck --  as he ran his hands over her
His fingers wiped away the traces of tears beneath her closed eyes

He leaned in close to her -- breathing her in and whispered

How much do you want this game to go on?
Will you take the next step?
will you quit on me?

Lorena shook her head "no" not knowing if she meant she didn't want to quit or didn't want to go on

She had almost forgotten it was even possible to end this
to open her eyes and end the game

Orion shocked himself with how much he wanted her - not just to taste her - to fuck her -- but to break her down

To tear off the last of her resistance
and see the slut inside

He was drunk with it

Orion reached into his pocket
and drew out the silk tie he had been fingering all night
dreaming of this moment

Unlatch the door

He felt her body shudder

Unlatch the door, climb up -- and place the blindfold over your eyes little girl

it's time
you're ready
be brave

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Lorena couldn't believe what was happening
She was there
pushed against his truck
his voice hot in her ears
his hands in her hair

she watched it distantly
through a haze

as she foggily measured the words

In one night
he had twisted her will

she had let him twist her will
and now

she realized she was considering
willingly leaving with her mystery man
who she had never seen
and knew nothing about

more than considering

she yearned for this strange man
burned for him

more than any other man.
She knew
that on the other side of that blindfold
anything could happen

everything would happen
it would be an adventure of a lifetime
she would have every dark fantasy explored
she would have excitement
and the dominance she craved

but she would never know
the rest of her life
who he was

He would haunt her
He would be every man she saw
and no man would hold a candle to him
he would be in her head forever
and she would never be free

and in one moment
she knew
she had to be brave

She turned her head up to him
and opened her eyes.



12 comments:

  1. Wow- I am not even sure what to say- although I think I knew she had to open her eyes and am glad you took her to that place.

    Isn't it great what happens when we take the chance and are brave!

    Bravo Bravo Bravo!

    ~faithful

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    1. @faithful - thanks -- I think it was the only thing she could do and keep a grip on herself.

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  2. That was awesome, terrifying, hot, exciting, and very well written. Bravo!

    Julia

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  3. What a wonderfully sexy, fascinating tale. i think there's a lot here beyond the story, i think it speaks to all kinds of archetypal stirrings, and you did it so beautifully.

    Yeah, she had to open her eyes.

    Sigh.

    Excellent story. Thanks!

    aisha

    P.S. You should have seen Sir's face though, when i tried to give him a brief synopsis of it. That was pretty funny. You really have to read it to appreciate the story!

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    1. @Aisha -- thank you so much for all your encouragement. It really helped me to find the story. and I bet your Sir was puzzled.

      it's sort of a fucked up fantasy

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  4. Wow, I was on the edge of ... Um... Well I'm reading this in bed. But ... Wow. I was rooting for, that's the interesting thing, I would alternate. You had me completely captivated. GREAT job!!!

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    1. SQsmlb -- yes -- I have to admit -- as I was writing it -- I wasn't sure which way she was going to go

      but then

      I liked her and wanted what was best for her.

      lol

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  5. The hardest, most intense thing that I've read in a fuck-all long time!! BRAVO!

    (I would have opened my eyes, just fwiw!)

    Your reasoning behind it is sane, logical...and oh so heartfelt. BRAVO, again! This was a delightful fantasy...and I loved every single word of it.

    HUG,

    nilla

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    1. ooooh Nilla -- you make me blush. You know I was working on him to make him "nilla-dark" - hot and scary

      I'm glad you loved it

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  6. sfp, i loved this and I think it touches something in all of us, that one thing that stops us in cold fear yet revs up the adrenaline and pushes forward to face the dark desires!!

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    1. Thank you violet - glad you enjoyed Lorena's tale of terror!

      sfp

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